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【麻烦英语达人批改一篇英语作文（高三）帮我看一下有什么错误,给我些建议.再打个分.CaringforChildrenInmycountry,mostofpeoplepayalotofattentiontobabiesandsmallchildren.somepeoplegiveuptheircareerin】
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麻烦英语达人批改一篇英语作文（高三）
帮我看一下有什么错误,给我些建议.再打个分.
CaringforChildren
Inmycountry,mostofpeoplepayalotofattentiontobabiesandsmallchildren.somepeoplegiveuptheircareerinordertocaretheirbabiesandsmallchildrenattentively.othersasktheirparentstocareforthem.seldomchildrenaresenttodaycarecentersbecausemostofparentsprefertolookafterrthembythemselveseveniftheyareverybusywiththeirwork.someparentssendtheirchildrentoswimmingcenters.thereareprofessionalswimmersandexperiencedteacherstoteachthemhowtoswim.childrenhavemanykindsoftoyssuchaspuzzles,beardolls.theyenjoyplayinggameswiththeirfriendslikehide-and-seek.theyarefondofsingingsongswhentheyareinhighspirits.forexample,twotigers,onlymomisniceintheworld.
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CaringforChildren
Inourcountry,mostpeoplepayalotofattentiontobabiesandchildren.Somepeoplegiveuptheircareersinordertocaretheirbabiesandchildrenattentively.Othersasktheirparentstocareforthem.Childrenareseldomsenttodaycarecentersbecausemostparentsprefertolookafterthembythemselveseveniftheyareverybusywiththeirwork.Someparentssendtheirchildrentoswimmingcenters.Thereareprofessionalswimmersandexperiencedteacherstoteachthemhowtoswim.Childrenhavemanykindsoftoys,suchaspuzzles,beardolls.Theyenjoyplayinggameswiththeirfriendslikehide-and-seeks.Theyarefondofsingingsongswhentheyareinhighspirits,forexample,TwoTigers,OnlyMomisNiceintheWorld.
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