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【谁帮我改改这段作文.只是个例子：TakemypianostudentCandyforexample.Herfatherisasuccessfulbusinessmanwhoearnsahugeamountofmoneyeveryyear.However,afterlearningthegoodnewsthatCandywonthefirstprizeinapian】
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谁帮我改改这段作文.
只是个例子：
TakemypianostudentCandyforexample.Herfatherisasuccessfulbusinessmanwhoearnsahugeamountofmoneyeveryyear.However,afterlearningthegoodnewsthatCandywonthefirstprizeinapianocompetition,herfathersaidgladly,theawardsmydaughterwonofferedmeamazingfeelingthatnomatterhowmuchmoneyIearnedcannevercomparewithit.
主要改语法和更好的表达.多谢!
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TakingmypianostudentCandyforexample,herfatherisasuccessfulbusinessmanwithsubstantialincomeeveryyear.AfterlearningthegoodnewsthatCandyhaswonthefirstplaceinapianocompet...
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