问题标题：
【cansomeonehelpmewithmypoem?thisisagainapoemofminewritteninmycreativewritingclass.andonceagainigottamentionedthatiamnotgoodatEnglish,anddon'tevenknowhowtowriteapoem,butnotarticles.thispoemisaboutmyDad'sdea】
问题描述：
cansomeonehelpmewithmypoem?
thisisagainapoemofminewritteninmycreativewritingclass.andonceagainigottamentionedthatiamnotgoodatEnglish,anddon'tevenknowhowtowriteapoem,butnotarticles.
thispoemisaboutmyDad'sdeath
thedayyoulefthome,
itwasthelasttimewemetonearth,
youhadraisemeup
for14years
andIhadn'tpaidforyouloveyet
youweresickinhospital
farawayfromhome
Ineverhadthechance
tovisityou
butheardyourvoicereallysickonphone
Iheldmytearseverytimewetalked
becauseIbelieveyouwouldbehome
recoverandhealth
3monthspassed
youwerehome
butwithadeathbody
iblamedonyou
youhadpromisedme
youwouldbebackhomealive
youbrokeyouwords
butididnothavechance
nomoretoforgaveyou
IloveyouDAD.
Iwantsomeonehelpmetocorrectthispoem.nottotranslateitintoChinese.
Thankyou
南风强回答：
这是一首诗再次书面地雷在我创作类.我再次提到的爱,我不擅长英语,甚至不知道如何写一首诗,而不是文章.这首诗是我父亲的死亡一天你离开了家,这是我们最后一次会见了地球上,你提高我14年和我没有支付你爱尚你生...
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