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AccordingtothechartthatshowssomefiguresofJapanesetouriststravellingabroad.Fromthetablewecanclearlyseethatintheyearbetween1985and1995,moreandmoreJapaneseperfertotravellingabroad,ratherthantourintheirowncountry.
Inthe5yearsspanningfrom1985through1990,thefigurehadasteadlyincresasefrom4milliontoover10million.In1991,thenumberhaddecreased.Thereisaconsiderableincreaseoccuredfrom1993to1995.Therewasnealy4milliongrowthinthethreeyearsspanningfrom1993through1995.
ThesecondgraphwhichisthepersentageofAstraliashareofJapanesetouristmarket.Thereis2%Japanesetouristtraveledin1995.Fromthisyearon,figureuptothepeak.therewasagradualgrowthinthe1988,thefigurereachingnear5%.
Inthefinalanalysis,icanconcludethatmoreandmoreJapaneseperfertotravellingabroad.Themarketisinternational.