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Oneofthemostpreciousloveintheworldistheparents’love.Asastudent.Weshouldlearnthevalueoflovefromourparents.Notonlytheyaretheclosestrelatives,buttheyhaveaffordalotforus.Frommanyyearsagotonow,myfamilyhavebeenha
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Oneofthemostpreciousloveintheworldistheparents’love.
Asastudent.Weshouldlearnthevalueoflovefromourparents.Notonlytheyaretheclosestrelatives,buttheyhaveaffordalotforus.
Frommanyyearsagotonow,myfamilyhavebeenhavingaspecialdinnereverySaturdayevening.WegatheredtogetherandItalkedaboutmysituationsorsomebadthingsandmyparentswilltrytoputforwardsomesuggestions.SoIhadneverbeenfacedtroublesalone.
Now,theuniversityentranceexaminationiscoming.Iremaindiligenceandtolerateinordertoattendagooduniversity.IfIcanbeadmittedbytheuniversity,Iwilltrymybesttostudysothatmyparentscouldhappyandbeproudofme.
只要有一丁点语法错误就揪出来,如果可以的话帮忙修改一下~
作文题目是感恩父母themostpreciouslove
雷建军回答：
第三行,afford不怎么合适,一般指买的起或者负担的起,可改成sacrificed
第四行,frommanyyearsagotonow,一般不这么表达吧,从过去一直到现在untilnow或者untiltoday就行了
既然都现在完成现在时了,后面wegathered,talkedabout就不用过去了呀,至少以后还会发生,用将来时吧.
第六行,faced前面been不要、
第七行,remain后面你又是名词又是动词的还用and连在一起,diligentandtolerant
最后一行,happy前面be忘了吧?
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