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【请帮我改一下我的英语作文,看一下有没有语病,如果可以的话请帮我修改一下文章.myfavoritestarDoyouknowWuZun?Heismyfavoritestar,andhisenglishnameisChunWu.ofcourse,Chunisveryhandsome,andicansayheis】
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请帮我改一下我的英语作文,看一下有没有语病,如果可以的话请帮我修改一下文章.
myfavoritestar
DoyouknowWuZun?Heismyfavoritestar,andhisenglishnameisChunWu.
ofcourse,Chunisveryhandsome,andicansayheismoreprettythanotheractors.Butit'snotthemostimportantreason.
ManypeoplethinkthatChun'sjustanactor,butwhoknowsthestoryofhim?
Chunissuccessfulbecauseofhishard-working.AfterChunfinishedhisstudy,hebecameamodeltomakemoney.Athoughhisfamilyisrich,hedidn'tusehisparents'money.Thenhehadhisowncompany.AndhebecametheyoungestentrepreneurinBrunei.He'sastarinthebusiness.Now,hebecomesanactor.He'salsoastarinEntertainment.
Chunsaid,hehasaverydifficulttimebeforefamous,buthedidn'tgiveup.
AfteriknewthethingsaboutChun,hehasbeenastarinmyeyes.thestarisbrightinmyroad,andi'llfollowthestarforevertomakemyowndreamcometure.
段雪涛回答：
myfavoritestar
DoyouknowWuZun?Heismyfavoritestar,andhisenglishnameisChunWu.
ofcourse,Chunisveryhandsome,andicansayheismoreprettythan(the)otheractors.Butit'snotthemostimportantreason.
ManypeoplethinkthatChun'sjustanactor,butwhoknowsthestoryof(behind)him?
Chunissuccessfulbecauseofhishard-working.AfterChunfinishedhisstudy,hebecameamodeltomakemoney.Athoughhisfamilyisrich,hedidn'tusehisparents'money.(hedidn'tasktheirparentsformoney)Thenhehadhisowncompany.AndhebecametheyoungestentrepreneurinBrunei.He'sastarinthebusiness.Now,hebecomesanactor.He'salsoastarinEntertainment.
Chunsaid,hehasaverydifficulttimebefore(加上being)famous,buthedidn'tgiveup.
After(改为since)iknewthethingsaboutChun,hehasbeenastarinmyeyes.thestarisbrightinmyroad,andi'llfollowthestarforevertomakemyowndreamcometure.
胡赤鹰回答：
我觉得我写的有点简易，然后请问这句话是不是对的。Hehasaprince'stemperament他有着王子般的气质
段雪涛回答：
可以
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