托福作文求修改+估分（09年的一道题）
Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?Ajobwithmorevacationtimeisbetterthanajobwithhighsalarybutlessvacationtime.Usespecificreasonsandexamplestosupportyouropinion.
Whenitcomestotheissueofwhetherweshouldchooseajobwithmorefreetimeorwithhighersalary,mostpeoplemayhaveanopinionthatweneedtoearnasmuchmoneyaswecouldinordertomakeourlivesbetter.However,thisideaissomewhatnotverypractical.Thereisnodoubtthatthosewhohaveawell-paidjobcanalwaysenjoymoreintheirmateriallives,butmorevacationtimecanprovidepeoplemoreopportunitiestoenjoytheirmentallives.
Firstofall,peoplecanhavethechancestoexperiencealotofdifferentthingsattheirvacationtime.Anincreasingnumberofpeoplebegintohaveadistanttripintheirvacations.Forinstance,IwouldliketovisitTibet,aprovincewithaspectacularlandscapeinChina,ifIhaveenoughtimetodosoduringmyholidays.Thesnowmountains,theblueskyandthesurgeoftheYangziriverinthatareaindeedappealtomealot.Ibelievethatwillbeanunforgettableandspecialexperienceformetohaveaclosecontactwiththenatureandlearnmoreaboutthelocalcultureandhistoryofthatregion,whichcanbenefitmebyexpandingmyhorizonsandknowledge.
Inaddition,thereisagrowingawareabouthowimportantitistogetfull-relaxedbeforewegobacktowork.Atworkdays,peoplecanalwayshardlyfindenoughtimetodosomesportstorelaxthemselves,buttheyareabletodosoinvacationtime.Forexample,IhaveafriendcalledLilywhohasajobwitha3-monthvacationeveryyear.Sheisverysatisfiedaboutthisvacationtimeeventhoughshecannotgetahighersalarybecauseshecanspend2hoursadaypracticingtennisathersparetime,whichmakesherbodyhealthierandhermoodmorerelaxable.Besidesdoingsports,listeningtomusic,watchingmoviesordoingsomeotherthingsareallgoodformsofrelaxation.Thosecanrefreshourmindfromlong-timebrainworksothatwecanworkevenmoreefficientlyandactivelyafterthevacations.
Finally,anotherequallycrucialaspectisthatmoreholidaytimeareneededforustoreunitewithourfamilies.Itisundeniablethatparentsalwayswanttheirchildrentomakemoremoneytoimpro