英语作文求批改（考研）
Aboutdiligence
Thereisagrowingnationalconsciousnessoftheimportanceofdiligence.Asisvividlyshowninpicture,thereiscollegestudentstudyingintheclassroom,doinghomeworkdiligently.Theimplicationisnotonlyinformativebutinstructiveaswell.Thispictureillustratesthetruemeaningofdiligencebystressingthefactthathardworkismentalstrength,whichcansupportusnomatterhowdifficulttheproblemweconfrontbecomes.
Ourhumanhistoryhasbeenfilledwithavarietyofexampleofdiligencewiththefollowingonebeingtheforemost.Trainingdiligentlyintheswimmingpooldayafterday,PhelpswithhisteammateswontheOlympicGamesagainandagain.Accordingtoonerecentsurveyconductedbyacertainnationalorganization98.5%ofpeopleinallwalksoflifearedevotedthemselvestotheircareer.Withouthardwork,wewouldn'thaveahappylife.
Consideringeveryaspectofthispositivephenomenon,weshouldbearinmindthatdiligenceisofdirectlysignificancetobothoursocietyandourselves.Thereforeallwalksoflifesuchasstudents,doctors,teachersandworkers,shouldworkpassionately.Inaddition,thegovernmenthastheresponsibilitytoeducateeverycitizentobeindustrious.Inconclusion,wehaveeveryreasontobeconvincedthatwecanachievemoreachievementsthroughworkingdiligently.
自己写的一个关于勤奋的作文,求帮忙看看有没语法错误,以及改进的地方