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这是一篇日记(题目是休闲活动),如果格式或者其他地方错了请帮忙改改.

DearDiary,

Todayismyschoolholiday,Iplayallday.

Inthemorning,myparentandIwenttoteahouse,weatedimsumandchatted.Later,mymotherandIwenttoshopping,inMongKok,

Iboughtclothesandshoes,butmymotherboughtcosmeticandhandbag.

Intheafternoon,mymotherandIwenttoJapanrestaurantatelunch,weatesushi,wasveryyummy,later,wewenttocinemasawamovie,themovienamewasAvater,thiswassciencefiction,thefilmwasveryhot,thelengthofafilmwas16minutes,wasverygood.Eneedthefilm,IwenttoswimminginKowloonParkSwimmingPool,thewaterwasverycoldandfilthy.

Intheevening,myparentandIwenttoPizzaHutatedinner,Iate

BakedSpaghettiBolongnaisewithcheese,wasveryyummy.Nexttime,my

friendsandIwenttoKowloonParkGymnasiumplayedbadminton,wewereverytired,latermyfriendandIwenttokaraoke,wesingerveryhappy,butIatdaybreaktowenthome.

Thisismyholiday.

14th6June