6小时,作文改错,However,althoughsheisagoodmother,shedeniedfacingtherealsituationinherfamily.Tomwantstobeapoet.Hedoesn’twanttoearnmoneyandspendthewholetimeonthewarehouse.Lauraisanunmarriedsister“…who’s|小学作文问答-字典翻译问答网

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6小时,作文改错,However,althoughsheisagoodmother,shedeniedfacingtherealsituationinherfamily.Tomwantstobeapoet.Hedoesn’twanttoearnmoneyandspendthewholetimeonthewarehouse.Lauraisanunmarriedsister“…who’s

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6小时,作文改错,

However,althoughsheisagoodmother,shedeniedfacingtherealsituationinherfamily.Tomwantstobeapoet.Hedoesn’twanttoearnmoneyandspendthewholetimeonthewarehouse.Lauraisanunmarriedsister“…who’scrippledandhasnojobs(1131).Inaddition,sheistooshytocommunicatewithothers.InAmanda’sdream,shewantsTomearnalotofmoneyandLauracanfindarichhusband.Unfortunately,shejustlivesinherowndream,hermanufactureillusions.

AmandatalkstoTomthat“Youliveinadream(1131)”.Infact,sheisright.Tom’sdreamistobeapoet.However,thesocialsituationstopshisdream.Tomhastoworkhardinthewarehouse.Hehastogetwagestosupporthisfamily.Afterworking,hehastocomebackhomeandliveswithtwodependentwomen.Hefeelsmentallyandphysicallytired.Hefeelsverydisappointed.Hegivesupallhisconcentrationonworkinganddoesn’thavethemotivationtochangehislife.Therefore,hewantstobeaspecialpersonandalwaysdreamstobeamoviestar.Forexample,healwaysgoestothecinemaatmidnight.Therefore,Tomalwaysgoestoseemovies.Ashementioned,hewantstobethelifeof“KillerWingfield(1098)”.Hewantstodothingswhateverhewants.Inshort,hegivesuphislifeandlivesinhisabstractdream.

InLaura’slife,shejustlivesinherownworld.Shehasalotofglass.WhenJimcamein,sheshowshimherfavoriteglassunicorn.Heretheunicornmeanshersource.Lauraisaveryshyandsensitivegirl.Shedoesn’thaveenoughself-confidencetomeetpeople.Whenshegoestocollege,sheistooshytofinishhercourse.Shedoesn’twanttocommunicatewithotherpeople,soshestaysathomeandplayherglass.WhenJim,thepersonsheloves,comesintoherownroom,sheshowsherglasstoJim.Here,theglassunicorncanrepresentthepersonalityofLaura,whichisveryeasytocrash.Shelivesinherglassdream.Therefore,whenJimrejectsherlove,Laura’sheartisbroken,suchasthecrashofglass.

AmandalaughsatTombecauseofthemanufacturingillusions;however,shedoesnotrecognizethatsheherselfisguiltyofthesamething.NotonlyTombutalsoAmandaandLauraliveintheirdream.Allofthreepeopledon’thavethecouragetofacetheproblemsintheirlives.It’ssosadthatthisfamilyislivinginthedream.

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　　However,(although->though)sheisagoodmother,(去掉逗号）she(deniedfacing->refusedtoface)therealsituationinherfamily.Tomwantstobeapoet.Hedoesn’twanttoearnmoneyandspendthewholetime(on->in)thewarehouse.Lauraisanunmarriedsister“…who’scrippledandhasnojobs(1131)(*少了一个").(Inaddition->Besides),sheistooshytocommunicatewith(+the)others.InAmanda’sdream,she(wantsTom->wantedforTomto)earnalotofmoneyand(Lauracan->forLauratobeableto)findarichhusband.Unfortunately,she(justlives->livesonly)inherowndream,her(manufacture->premeditated)illusions. 　　Amanda（talksto-〉tells/told)Tomthat“Youliveinadream(1131)”.Infact,(去掉逗号）sheisright.（+It's)Tom’sdream(-is)tobeapoet.However,the(socialsituation?不懂想表达什么,可以考虑circumstance这个词）stopshisdream.Tomhastoworkhardinthewarehouse（.Hehas->inorder)to(getwages->earnwages或getpaid)tosupporthisfamily.Afterworking,hehastocome(backhomeandlives->hometosharehislife)withtwodependentwomen.Hefeelsmentallyandphysically(tired.Hefeelsverydisappointed.->exhaustedandveryfrustrated.)He(givesupallhisconcentrationonworking->losesallhisfocusatwork或losesallhisdesiretowork)and(doesn’thavethe->haslittle)motivationtochangehislife.Therefore,hewantstobeaspecialpersonand(+he)alwaysdreamsto(be->become)amoviestar.(Forexample,->Thatexplainswhy)healwaysgoestothecinemaatmidnight(.Therefore,Tomalways->andwhyhe)goesto(-see)movies(+sooften).Ashementioned,hewantstobethelifeof“KillerWingfield(1098)”.He(wantstodothings->wouldliketodo)whateverhewants.Inshort,he(givesuphis->escapesfromhisreal)lifeandlivesinhisabstractdream. 　　InLaura’slife,she(justlives->livesonly)inherownworld.Shehasalotof(+thingsmadein)glass.WhenJimcamein,she(shows->showed)him(herfavoriteglassunicorn.Heretheunicornmeans->theglassunicorn-herfavorite,asymbolof)hersource(不懂source在此作何解释）.Lauraisaveryshyandsensitivegirl.Shedoesn’thaveenoughself-confidencetomeetpeople.Whenshegoestocollege,sheistooshytofinishhercourse.Shedoesn’t(want->feelcomfortable)tocommunicatewithotherpeople,soshestaysathomeandplay(+with)herglass(+es).WhenJim,thepersonsheloves,comesintoher(-own)room,sheshows(herglasstoJim->himherglass).Here,theglassunicorn(canrepresentthepersonalityofLaura->maybeinterpretedasLaura'spersonality),which(isveryeasytocrash->canveryeasilycrash).Shelivesinherglassdream.Therefore,whenJimrejectsherlove,Laura’sheartisbroken,(suchas->justlike)thecrashofglass. 　　AmandalaughsatTombecauseof(themanufacturing->hispremeditated)illusions;however,she(doesnot->failsto)recognizethatsheherselfisguiltyofthesamething.NotonlyTombut(-also)AmandaandLaura(+all)liveintheirdream(+s).(Allofthreepeopledon’thave->Noneofthethreehas)thecourageto(face->confront或dealwith)theproblemsintheirlives.It’ssosadthatthis(+whole)familyislivingin(-the)dream(+s). 　　注：我保留了原文添加了改善的方式,希望你能看得懂.此外,全文的时态应该要重新斟酌一下.虽然是读书报告的样式,个人认为用现在时不太恰当.

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