字典翻译 问答 小学 作文 【雅思大作文谁来帮我改改都错在哪儿雅思大作文题目是学生上课的内容应该由政府还是由学生自己来决定Schoolingisalmostthemostimportancepartofchildren’sgrowingup.Atopicisbeingdiscussedbysothege】
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【雅思大作文谁来帮我改改都错在哪儿雅思大作文题目是学生上课的内容应该由政府还是由学生自己来决定Schoolingisalmostthemostimportancepartofchildren’sgrowingup.Atopicisbeingdiscussedbysothege】
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雅思大作文谁来帮我改改都错在哪儿

雅思大作文

题目是学生上课的内容应该由政府还是由学生自己来决定

Schoolingisalmostthemostimportancepartofchildren’sgrowingup.Atopicisbeingdiscussedbysothegeneralpublicisthatwhichcandecidecoursecontentforchildren.

Somepeoplethinkthatpupilshavetherighttodecideallkindsoflessons’contenttheywant.Individualstudentshavedifferentpersonalities.Sostudentscannotbeattractedbycertaincurriculumandgiveuptoattendthelectureiftheydon’tlikeit.Soitalsocanlimitspupils’potentialandleadtolosetheirconfidence,becausetherearenothingattractiveandcanbechallengedduringtheclass.

Othersthink,whatever,thegovernmentshouldmakedecisionaboutcontentoflecture.Becausegovernment’sdecisionismorescientificandobjective,students’personalmanagementfrequentlyisnotenoughstrongandtheycanmakethecertainclassdisappearwhichisunwelcomeiftheycanchooseclassesastheirwishes.Additionally,educationistwilldesignmoreperfectdecisiontoadopttoschooling.Amongthese,ministryofeducationalsoplayathemostimportantrole.

Myownviewisthatthegovernmentdecisionishelpfulforschooling;howevereducationistsshouldacquirepupils’wishesincreasingly.Asforstudents,theyneedtoreflecteducationquestionsintimetorelatedministry.Simultaneously,theyshouldtrytopreferablyplantheirtimeforstudyingstudyandrest.Onlyinthiswaycanhelpstudentstostudymoreefficiently.

刘志勇回答:
  ==低级语法错误太多,importantpart,atopichasbeingdiscussed,还有什么叫sothegeneralpublic?开头就一堆错,文中语法错误也不少,不列举了,回去自己挑错.别一味求高级语法,我帮别人改作文经常因为这个郁闷,用起来高级语法要么不适合,要么不对,要么有不适合又不对,先求无错再说;   单词太单调,高级词汇特别是形容词副词数量不足,而且简单词汇重复率太高;   逻辑架构很一般,因为思维差异,中国考生这部分一向不强,所以建议多用连词衔接.你连词用的过少而且太低级,一直so,so,整体文章衔接很不严密,好多句子读起来很突兀   文章内容观点还可以,论点论述都有而且没啥错误,不过论述展开一般.倒没啥问题,就是写作句法要加强.其他三项多下功夫吧
孟月萍回答:
  只求5。5。。。4月12号的雅思考试怎么整?
刘志勇回答:
  ==你现在作文感觉也就5分水准,语法单词差太多,语法别犯低级错误,高级语法用自己会的,不会写用逗号分开结构清晰点,单词别用低级词汇和重复词汇,连词下点功夫。写作多练吧,仿范文写。我当时30天写了20篇小作文,40篇大作文,从5.5直接到6.5
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