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Thesedays,wecaneasilyfindthatsomepeopleensurethatitistooyoungtogotoschoolforchildrenbeforesix-yearold.Butothersbelievethatitisimportantforyoungchildrentogotoschoolassoonaspossible
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Itismyconsideredviewthatchildrenshouldallowedtostayathomeandplaywithfriendsuntiltheyaresixorsevenyearsold
Theprimaryreasonisstudy.Foryoungchildren,themostimmediatefactorisunderstandingability.Weknowthedon’thaveahighleaveunderstandingabilitywhenwearealittlebaby.
Moreover,youngchildrenneedmoreandmoreplayingwithfriendsforcultivatecreativeability,individuality,socialabilityandect.Thereasonwhyweshouldmakechildrenstayhomebeforesixorseventearsold.
Nevertheless,thatwemakechildrengotoschoolasearlyascanteachmoreandmorescholarship.Butthekidscan’treallyrealizewhatischildhood.
Tosummarise,thattheyoungchildrenstayhomeuntilsixorsevenyearsoldiswelladvisedinmypersonalidea.