谁能帮我判判作文?我下个月8号就要考雅思了.

剑桥四第一篇作文

我写的：Accordingtothetable,thereweredifferentcategoriesoffamilieslivinginpovertyinAustualiain1999.

Tosunup,therewere11%oftheallhusbandlivinginthepositiondeeply.Itisabout1837000.Itisnoticeablethatthoseconsistingofonlyareparentorasingleadultweremorelakelytofallintrouble,with21%and19%.Acommonfamilyandafamilywithnochildwasaccountforonly13%and7%,whichshandsinmarkedcontrasttothen.

Itischearfromthecharttherelationshipbetweensigleandcoupleappearproportion.Singleadultswere2timesthancoupleswithoutchildren(7%).

However,itdidn'taffectelderpeopletoomuch.Whentheywerenotyoung,theywerenottobepoor.Singlewith6%,andcouplewith4%.

Inconclusion,childrentrendfamilyalotinthetableuntiltheywereold.

图表作文，不同的人生活在贫困的比率。