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Anincreasingnumberofpeoplechangetheircareerandplaceofresidenceseveraltimeduringtheirlives.Isthisapositiveornegativedevelopment?
Neverhavechangesofoursocietyorindividualsbeensonnumerousastheyaretoday.Intermsofindividuals,thenumberofpeoplewhoaltertheiroccupationandplaceofrecidenceconstantlyisgrowing,whichsincepeoplehaveincreasinglyownthoughtsandlookforwardtogaindebelopmentorpromotion.Forthissituation,therearebothadvantagesanddisadvantages.
Changingcareerandresidencehasseveralbenefitsforindividuals,companiesandoursociety.Thereisnodenyingthefactthatanumberofpeopledonotsatisfywiththeircurrentjoborresidence.Asaresult,applyinganewjobormovingtoanothermoresuitableplaceisaneffetivewaytoobtainopportunitiesofadvancementevenmorepositivecareerprospects.Futhermore,itenableindividualstoexpendtheiroutlook,enrichtheirxeperienceandknowaboutdiverseculture,whichmakepeoplehavemoreabilitiesofcompetition.Additionally,thefact,peoplechangingtheirjob,meanscompainesneednewemployeeswhowouldbringaboutfreshblood,creativeabilityandadvancedthoughtstoreplacepreviouspeople.Thecompanwouldbenefitsfromthecommunicationbetweentalentedpersonfromdifferententerprisessuchasimprovementofcompanyculture,infomationgaboutcompetitorsandmoresfficienttechnology.Besides,oursoucietywouldbemoreactiveduetothesechanges.Ifindividualsnevermakeanychanges,itwouldbehardtoimaginehowoursocietylike.
Eventhoughthereareabunchofadvantages,thesechangesalsobringaboutpositiveimpactforus.Asweallknow,itisalongtimethatemployeesarriveattopsoftheircareer,sincetheymustaccumulateexperience,evenspendmuchtimeonwaittinganuncommonchancefirthis.Sotheywouldlosealltheirfundationthatestablishedforseveralyearsiftheyaltercareerorresidenceoften.Itisnodoubtthattheyneedcostalonganduncertaintimetoadopttonewenvironment.Companiesthatthesepeoplestayedwouldfaceseveralcrucialproblemslikethetalentflight,losingoftradesecr