字典翻译 问答 小学 作文 托福作文一篇请专家帮忙打分顺便给点建议Withthedevelopmentofthepaceofthemodernage,technologyembodiesitsmoreandmoreimportantauthoritygradually.Anditisnotonlyseedsinourdailylifeathome,butalsotheacademi
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托福作文一篇请专家帮忙打分顺便给点建议Withthedevelopmentofthepaceofthemodernage,technologyembodiesitsmoreandmoreimportantauthoritygradually.Anditisnotonlyseedsinourdailylifeathome,butalsotheacademi
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托福作文一篇请专家帮忙打分顺便给点建议

Withthedevelopmentofthepaceofthemodernage,technologyembodiesitsmoreandmoreimportantauthoritygradually.Anditisnotonlyseedsinourdailylifeathome,butalsotheacademicstudy.Foronereasonisthatpeoplecannotlivesmoothlywithouttechnology.Devolopingthetechnology,howere,frommystandpoint,isnotonlydependingonpersons’creativeideas,butalsorelyinguponthemoneyinvestedtosomeextent.

Nowadays,peoplegraduallylearnaboutthesignificanceoftheInternetwhichisseedingperson’slifedeeplyinthisera.Becauseoftheimportanceofthetechnologytakingcomputerastherepresentative,peoplepayalotofattentionsoninvestingcomputersystemseverywhere,suchasuniversitylibrary.

IprefertousingmoneytobuycomputersratherthanjustbuyingbooksinthisgoldenageofInternet.AsfarasIamconcerned,learningtousecomputerfluentlyismorevitalthangainninginformationbyreadingbooks.ThemostimportantreasonisthatInternethelpussearchfornewsandseekforinformationfaster,sothatwewillimprovetheefficiencyofourworkingandstudying,andmoreover,acceleratetherapidforpersonstoobtainandrenewtheinformationallovertheworld.Thatistosay,ifyouneedtosearchformaterialsaboutHellenKeller,afamousAmericanwriter,suchasherbackgroundsorthenameofherbooks,willyoulookfortheappreciatebooksonebyonefromthebookshelvesortakegooduseofthesearchenginethroughcomputerinstead?Whichmethodwouldyouchoosefrom?Andwhichoneisthemosttime-savingapproach?Ofcoursethelatterone.

Needlesstosay,booksreallycostlowerthancomputerdoes.Thus,weneedtoinvestmoneytobuycomputersinordertoimprovetheapproachandeducationsystemforstudentswholikereading.Inmyopinion,weshouldsavemoremoneyfrombuyingbooksandspenditoncomputerexpenses.Bythis,Imean,bookscanbeeasilycollectedbylibraryfromeverywherepeopledewell,everywherepeoplelikereading.However,wecannoteasilycollectgoodfunctionalcomputersfromsurroundings.

Tohelpstudentslearnmoreabouttheworldandlearnfasterinthiscompetitivesocietyiswhattheuniversitylibrariesdonext.Collegestudentsinmodernagecannotbesatisfiedwithreadingb

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  分我是不太会估,满分6分的话,我估计3.5-4分.提点建议和努力的方向吧,1.整体来说语法错误有点多,句型有重复的,2.建议复杂词的词义不清楚的情况下多用简单词,一些词的词义有混淆.3.整篇文章逻辑上不够紧凑.4.少用插...
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