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急,麻烦各位帮我看看这篇作文有什么语病吗,谢谢TodayisSaturdaySeptember3rd2011.WhenIgotupat6:45,itissolittletimeformetocatchtheearlybusthatihadtoridetoschoolinahurry.Whenigottoschool,therewasma
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急,麻烦各位帮我看看这篇作文有什么语病吗,谢谢
TodayisSaturdaySeptember3rd2011.WhenIgotupat6:45,itissolittletimeformetocatchtheearlybusthatihadtoridetoschoolinahurry.Whenigottoschool,therewasmanystudentsstandingintheschoolgatebecausetheschoolclosed.Myfriendandidecidedtohaveapicnicintheparkandwedidnotgohomeuntilmymothercalledmegoinghomebybus.Nowitis9:00anditistimeforgoingtobed.大致意思是今天是2011年9月3日,星期六早晨6点45分起床,匆忙去上学,学校停课.然后和几个同学去野餐,乘车回家.9点睡觉.
陈甦欣回答：
TodayisSaturday,September3rd2011.Igotupat6:45,soIhadverylittletimetocatchtheearlybus.ThereforeIhadtoridetoschoolinahurry.Wheniarrivedatschool,thereweremanystudentsstandinginfrontoftheschoolgatebecausetheschoolwasclosed.Myfriendandidecidedtohaveapicnicinaparkandwedidnotgohomeuntilmymothercalledme.ThenIwenthomebybus.Nowitis9:00andtimetogotobed.
我随便改了下,差不多比较通顺了.
韩梅回答：
不好意思。我忘说了，整篇文章只能用五句话描述，所以请问还能再缩下吗
陈甦欣回答：
晕。。。等下哈，我来试试TodayisSaturday,September3rd2011.(1)Igotupat6:45,whichleftmeverylittletimetocatchtheearlybus，sothatIhadtoridetoschoolinahurry.(2)Wheniarrivedatschool,thereweremanystudentsstandinginfrontoftheschoolgatebecausetheschoolwasclosed.(3)MyfriendandidecidedtohaveapicnicinaparkandIwenthomebybusaftermymothercallingme.(4)Nowitis9:00andtimetogotobed.(5)
韩梅回答：
Igotupat6:45,whichleftmeverylittletimetocatchtheearlybus，sothatIhadtoridetoschoolinahurry.这句是什么意思啊
陈甦欣回答：
就是我6点45起床，加个从句表示这个状况我没有时间去做公交，然后我只好骑去学校
韩梅回答：
我还是不太理解，可以改得简单点吗
陈甦欣回答：
好吧。。。把第二句改成IhadtoridetoschoolinahurrybecauseIgotupat6:45andIdidnothaveenoughtimetocatchtheearlybus.这样可以了吧。。。？
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