字典翻译 问答 小学 英语 几篇自己写的英语作文请大家指教.倡议捐钱.OnMay12nd2008,therewasaearthquakeinSichuan.Manychildrenlosttheisfatherormother.Agreatnumberofschoolarealsocavedin.thestudentcan'tstudyanymore.Doyouhaveanypoc
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几篇自己写的英语作文请大家指教.倡议捐钱.OnMay12nd2008,therewasaearthquakeinSichuan.Manychildrenlosttheisfatherormother.Agreatnumberofschoolarealsocavedin.thestudentcan'tstudyanymore.Doyouhaveanypoc
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几篇自己写的英语作文请大家指教.

倡议捐钱.

OnMay12nd2008,therewasaearthquakeinSichuan.Manychildrenlosttheisfatherormother.Agreatnumberofschoolarealsocavedin.thestudentcan'tstudyanymore.DoyouhaveanypocketmoneyorlucymoneytodonateIfyoudonateyourloveIthinkthestudentsinSichuanwillhaveachancetostudyandtheywillthankyoufordoingthat.Pleaseraisesomemoney

做菜.

Makesandwich

First,cuttwopiecesofbreadsecond,spreadbutteronthem.Next,spreadsomefeuitsuchaspears,tomatoes,andsoon.Next.putsomelettuceandthebeefslicesonthebread.Afterthat,puttherelishonthebeef.Finally,putanotherpieofbreadonthetop.

不穿校服.

Moetmiddleschoolrequestthestudentstoweartheschooluniformatschool.Butagreatnumberofstudentdon'tliketheschooluniform.Schooluniform'sdesignisnotlikedbythestudent.Theschooluniformcan'tshowstudent'sindividuality.Ithinkschoolshouldchangethesysterm.Thenstudentsmustlikeschoolbetter.

一些语法错误请纠正.

黄明键回答:
  1therewasaearthquakeinSichuan   改为:AearthquakehappenedinSichuan   Manychildrenlosttheisfatherormother   改为:Alotofchildrenlosttheirparents   Agreatnumberofschoolarealsocavedin   “好多”是复数,schools还有过去时are-were   IfyoudonateyourloveIthink   改为IthinkIfyoudonateyourlove我觉得更通顺,你随便   2你的连词不必总是Next像then就可以   3Moet-most   request:请求用在这里不太合适换成make,makesbdo,你把to去掉   “agreatnumberofstudent”,student+s   systerm用在这里不太合适换成:rule,规章制度   Ithinkschoolshouldchangethesysterm.Thenstudentsmustliketheirschoolbetter.   改为IthinkiftheschoolchangeStherulethestudentswillbehappier   可能还有不足,不过希望我能帮到你!
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