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【帮我改篇英语作文,以高考标准,OneThingI'mProudofIcanclearlyrememberathingwhichI'mproudof.AsIrecall,mygradeswasverypoorbeforelong.Myparentsworriedaboutmyfutureandalwaysfoundfaultwithmeduetomypoorgrade】
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帮我改篇英语作文,以高考标准,
OneThingI'mProudof
IcanclearlyrememberathingwhichI'mproudof.AsIrecall,mygradeswasverypoorbeforelong.Myparentsworriedaboutmyfutureandalwaysfoundfaultwithmeduetomypoorgrades.Lifeislikeaboxofchocolate,youneverkonwwhatyouaregoingtoget.Gradually,Irealizedtheimportanceofgrades.Also,Iknowthatarosyfuturedependsonhands.Therefore,Idecidedtoconcentrateonmystudyandsticktomydream.ThereisnodenyingthatImakegreatprogresswiththejointeffortsofparentsandteachers.What'smore,Ilearnalotofthingsfrommyexperienceandrealizedit'stimeformetosparemostofmytimetostudy.Tobebrief,Iwillliveuptomyparents'expectationandclingtomydream.
刘青峰回答：
IcanclearlyrecalltheaccomplishmentIammostproudofinmylife.Inthepast,mygradeswereextremelypoorandthissaddenednotonlyme,butmyparentsaswell.[Lifeislikeaboxofchocolate,youneverknowwhatyouaregoingtoget.](不太懂这句想表达的.)Astimepassedby,Igraduallycametograspandrealizetheimportanceofgrades.Therefore,Idecidedtoconcentrateonmystudiesandjustgiveitmyall.TheprogressImadewiththejointeffortsofmylovingparentsandsupportiveteacherswasastounding.Fromthenon,lifebecameachallengethatIreadilyandhappilyaccept,filledwithhopeanddetermination.It'ssomethingItacklewithallmymightandlivetothefullest.Thisexperienceandsuccessfulchangewithinmyselfhastaughtmeinnumerouslessonsthatarecrucialtothemeaningoflife.Asaresult,Inowdomybesttoliveuptomyparent'sexpectationsandfulfillmydreams.
Didthisreallyfastsopleaseexcuseanytyposifthere'sany.追问ifyagotanyquestions,butIcan'tanswertonightsosorryboutthat.
陈羿回答：
Thankyousomuch,Icanappreciateit.ButIhaveaquestion.Didyoufindanymistakesinmyarticle?Thatsentencejustempressmychangesissudden.Soyouneverknowwhatyouaregoingtoget.
刘青峰回答：
Mistakesinyourparagraph?Well...I'llbehonestwithyou.Therewereseveralmistakesinvocabandgrammar.Youtriedtoelaborateyoursentenceswithfancierwords,buttheyweren'tnecessarilyusedcorrectlyanddidn'tquiteconnectwithotherwords.Asforgrammar,therewereafewmistakesinpunctuation,butmosterrorswereinthesentenceitself.
Thatsentenceinbracketscanbetakenout,youdon'treallyneedit.
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