字典翻译 问答 小学 作文 求SAT作文评分和修改!istherealwaysanotherpointofviewAcoinhastwosides.A“however”doesexistallthetime.Everythinghasitsbenefitsanditsdrawbacks.Sometimeswearemorelikelytobeimpressedbythenegativeinfluence,sucha
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求SAT作文评分和修改!istherealwaysanotherpointofviewAcoinhastwosides.A“however”doesexistallthetime.Everythinghasitsbenefitsanditsdrawbacks.Sometimeswearemorelikelytobeimpressedbythenegativeinfluence,sucha
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求SAT作文评分和修改!istherealwaysanotherpointofview

Acoinhastwosides.A“however”doesexistallthetime.Everythinghasitsbenefitsanditsdrawbacks.Sometimeswearemorelikelytobeimpressedbythenegativeinfluence,suchasfrustration,andneglectthepositivefacet.The“however”remindsmeofagreatmaninthefieldofscience,AlfredBernhardNobel.

Nobelheld355differentpatents,dynamiteisthemostfamous.AndthebirthofdynamitecostNobelalot.Before1867,peopleusednitroglycerinwhichhasapoorstabilityasexplosive.Itcausedmanydeathsofworkerseveryyear.Inordertoprotectpeople’ssafety,Nobletriedhisbesttomakesomeimprovementonthebasisofnitroglycerin.Then,heburiedhimselfintoexperimentsdayandnight.

Outofeverybody’sexpectation,thepathtosuccessisextremelyrugged.Theexperimentsareout-and-outnightmares.Oncehislabwasblewup,notonlyhehimselfwasinjured,butmanyofhisassistantsdied,includinghisdearbrother.Hisneighboursaresoscaredthattheyalienatedhimandgraduallymovedaway.Eventhegovernmentstartedtoforbidhimfromdoingexperience.Withoutanysupport,Noblestilldidn’tsubmittothedreadfulsituation,madeuphismindtogettheachievementinstead.PlacingthelabontheMalarenLake,Noblecontinuedtofindtherootwhereproblemsoccurred.HechangedtheprimacordandusedHg(ONC)2tomaketheprimer.Finally,theMalarenLakebecamethewitnessofhissuccess,thepavementofhispersistence,courageandmeritofexploring.

IfNoblehadnotgonethroughtheexperimentsandmetthecripplingconsequence,hecouldnotgainsomuchinformationabouttheproductinordertogetabettersolvement.Ifitwas’tthegriefabouthisrelatives’deathsandtheobjectionoftheneighboursandgovernment,hewouldn’tbecomesoaggressivetofinishtheresearch,thedynamitewouldn’tbeinvented,numbersofdeathscausedbylow-securityemplosivewouldkeepincreasing,andallthepreviouseffortswouldbeturnedtonothing.So,valueisnotfoundonlyinsuccess.Difficultiescan’tbethestumblingstone.Failure,ifonelearnsfromit,canleadtoaccomplishment.

邱渡裕回答:
  有点小拼写语法错误,楼主看看事态就可以了,譬如NUMBERofdeathscausedbylow-security(换volatile)EXPLOSIVESwouldHAVEKEPTincreasing.其他的就不一一列举了,如果楼主有时间,可以适当换一些SAT词进去,考官...
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