逐句分析的追加5-10分,求帮修改作文,写错语法错误需要改正的地方,15分满分能打几分?.准备考四级的

telephoneorletter

withthedevelopingoftechnology,telephonehasbeenusedallovertheworld.whenaskedwhichisthebestwaytocontactwithothers,telephoneorletter?differentpeoplehavedifferentanswers.mostpeoplechoosetheformerwhileotherschoosethelater.

thepeoplewhoholdthefirstopinionbelievethatcontactingbytelephoneismoreconveniencethanbyletter.especiallythemobilephone,youcancontactwithothersbyiswheneverandwhereveryouwant.however,otherswhochoosethelateropinionmaythinkthatitcansavemuchmoneyoncontactingbyletterthanbytelephone.and,somepeopleareshytoexpresstheirmindtoothersbythedirectingway,suchastelephone.forexample,asgirls,theyusuallyshytoshowtheirlovetoboysfacetofaceandbytelephone.mostofthemprefertoshowtheirlovebytheletter.

inmyeyes,thetwochoiceshavetheirownadvantages.whicheverchoiceonemakes,hehashisownreasons.afterweightingupthesetwochoices,ithinkiwillcontantwithothersbytelephoneinmosttime,butsometimeiwillchoosethelettertoo.