字典翻译 问答 雅思作文帮忙修改打分Somepeoplethinkearliertechnologychangedourlivesmorethanrecenttechnology.Doyouagreeordisagree?Technologyisplayinganimperativeroleinourliveswhichpromotesthedevelopmentofsociety.Colourfullife
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雅思作文帮忙修改打分Somepeoplethinkearliertechnologychangedourlivesmorethanrecenttechnology.Doyouagreeordisagree?Technologyisplayinganimperativeroleinourliveswhichpromotesthedevelopmentofsociety.Colourfullife
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Somepeoplethinkearliertechnologychangedourlivesmorethanrecenttechnology.Doyouagreeordisagree?

Technologyisplayinganimperativeroleinourliveswhichpromotesthedevelopmentofsociety.Colourfullifeinpresentagebenefitfromsustainabletechnologyandearlierinnovationsreallymadeourliveshadmoresignifigentchangesthanrecentinnovations.

Acientsociety,peoplehadnovehiclesandonlyonfoot,hadboringleisureactivitiesandwithnoelectricalequipmentuntiltheearliertechnologysprangout,takecomputersforexample,modernlifecannotlivewithoutcomputers.Prevalentcomputersmakepeoplemoreconvenient,whichcauseusdoalmosteverythingathome.Earliertechnologyimprovedessentiallifeintermsoffood,clothing,housingandtransportationandchangedbackwardlifeintoanewage.Bycontrast,newtechnologyistooadvancedandcosttoomuchmoneythataveragefamiliescannotaffordit.Mosthi-techareinventedforscientificactivitiesratherthandailylife.Eavliertechnologysuchasmobilephones,cars,internetetc,whicharesatisfieldbypeopleincurrentlifeandreallybroughtgreatchanges.

Recent,technologymayputinuseinfuturelifeandgivemorechangesassocietyissustainabledeveloping.However,allthenewtechnologyisbasedonearliertechnologyweshouldnotonlyforgettheearliertechnologybutalsorememberthecontributionofit.

Insum.Technologyreallychangelifealotregarlessofearlierorrecent.Thoughearlierismorepractical.Asaresultofit,earlysocietywastransformedmorethancurrentsociety.Goveronmentshouldletscientficauthoritiesresearchmorepracticaltechnologyandputtheminuseindailylife.Oursocietywillbreakthroughandstepintoanewpage.

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  1.拼错的单词:Acientsociety(ancient),sprangout(sprangout),signifigentchanges(significant),Eavlier(earlier)technology,aresatisfield(satisfied)bypeople   2.句法:个人感觉句子没有必要写那么长.句子太长的话反而容易出错.另外还要注意下表达方式.Colourfullifeinpresentagebenefitfromsustainabletechnologyandearlierinnovationsreallymadeourliveshadmoresignifigentchangesthanrecentinnovations.   inpresentage改成“nowadays”,"madeourliveshadmoresignifigentchanges"改成“broughtmoresignificantchangesthan”   3.格式:雅思作文最好写成“introduction-body-conclusion”,   4.总体感觉这篇作文在6分左右.
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