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【英语作文批改itgoeswithoutsayingthatthecartoonaimsatrevealingacommonandseriouspheonmenoninoursociety:withtherapiddevelopmentofinternet,Wechooseitastheonlytooltocommunicatewithothersanddon'twanttodothesame】
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英语作文批改
itgoeswithoutsayingthatthecartoonaimsatrevealingacommonandseriouspheonmenoninoursociety:withtherapiddevelopmentofinternet,Wechooseitastheonlytooltocommunicatewithothersanddon'twanttodothesamethinginthereality.Therefore,Welivemuchcloserthananytimebeforeyetthedistanceinsideofusfurtherlongthananytimebeforetoo.
麻烦各位说下都哪里错了或者给出更好的写法,
那个Rachel高萍~第一句话是如图所示的意思，这是看图作文第二段，不是说卡通，晕这都看不明白么
侯馨光回答：
【Asisclearlyshownbythecartoon】（加上这个可能好点）,itgoeswithoutsayingthatthecartoonaimsatrevealingacommon（andseriou）（去掉括号里面）pheonmenoninoursociety:withtherapiddevelopmentofinternet,
（Wechooseitastheonlytooltocommunicatewithothers）
唯一的交流工具,不符合现实,应该改为theessentialtool或者thepopulartool
可以改为：Theinrernethasbecomeessencialtoourlife,Wechooseitasthepopulartooltocommunicatewithothers
anddon'twanttodothesamething(inthereality).
(inthereality)应该为inreallife
Therefore,Welivemuchcloserthananytimebefore
yetthedistance
（insideof）改为(between)us(become)further(long)改为（longer）thananytimebeforetoo.
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