第一段Ilikeautomobiles.Automobilesarethefastestoneofthecivilproductssincetheinventionofthetraffictools. 　　错误分析： 　　1.thefastestoneofthecivilproducts应该为oneofthefastestcivilproducts 　　第二段Itprovidespeoplewithcomfortabledrivingconditionbecauseofitssuperiorfunctions.Italsosatisfiesdifferentrequirementsofvariouskindsofpeopleduetoitsconstantlyappearencedesigns.Itownsthedaytodaysafetyassurancesystem,whichreducestheunsafetythathighspeeddrivingcouldbringsasfaraspossible.Ithassuccessfullybeentheindispensablepartofpeople'slivesinmodernsociety. 　　错误分析： 　　2.Itprovidespeoplewithcomfortabledrivingconditionbecauseofitssuperiorfunctions要么用代词theyprovidepeoplewith…becauseoftheirsuperiorfunctions呼应上文,要么改为anautomobileprovidespeoplewith…becauseofitssuperiorfunctions. 　　3.后面的和its按照第二条意见逐一改动,同时要注意其他名词与所用主语的数的一致,如Itsatisfies…duetoitsconstantlyappearencedesign或者theysatisfy…duetotheirconstantlyappearencedesigns 　　4.couldbringsasfaraspossible情态动词could后要用动词原形bring 　　第三段However,thenegativeeffectthatitproducedhasbeencontinuousllytakingonasoneofthereasonsthatthevehiclescommoditizationcausestheglobalwarming.Thenumberofpeoplediedandhurtinannualtrafficaccidentshasbeengraduallyincreasing.InChina,onepersondiesinthetrafficaccidentseveryfiveminutes.Onepersoncanbehurtedinthetrafficaccidentseveryoneminute.Moreandmoreautomobileshavecausedthetrafficjamsineverycities.Thesearetheunavoidabledrawbacksthatautomobilesbringusconvienceatthesametime. 　　错误分析： 　　5.thevehiclescommoditization改为thecommoditizationofvehicles比较符合语法. 　　6.onepersondiesinthetrafficaccidentseveryfiveminutes中oneperson泛指某一个人,如果改为Thereisonepersondyinginthetrafficaccidentseveryfiveminutes就合理了.同理,有一句话也应该如此处理,或者改为与前一举并列andonepersonbeingabletobehurtedinthetrafficaccidentseveryoneminute. 　　7.Thesearetheunavoidabledrawbacks中的the应该删除. 　　第四段Ifpeopleobeythetrafficrulesstrictly,drivesafelyandtakepublictransportationasmuchaspossible,thenegtiveeffectscanbereducedtothelowestpoint. 　　错误分析： 　　8.takepublictransportation用take表示“乘坐”应该跟具体名词,此处可以改为takepublicvehicles,或者把动词换为go,后面用bymeansofpublictransportation. 　　第五段Wecannotstoptheprogressofmoderntechnologiesbutcanavoidtheharmfulnessthatitcanbring.Inthisway,wecanstillenjoyautomobiles.