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高手帮我批改一下这篇英语作文帮我看看这篇作文,给我些具体的意见,OnedayIwasabouttogooutsidetoplaywhenIsawmymotherbeingbusywithseveralhouseworkatthesametime.Shelookedsotired,andIfeltguilty,There
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高手帮我批改一下这篇英语作文
帮我看看这篇作文,给我些具体的意见,
OnedayIwasabouttogooutsidetoplaywhenIsawmymotherbeingbusywithseveralhouseworkatthesametime.Shelookedsotired,andIfeltguilty,ThereforeImadeadeterminationtosharehouseworkwithher.Iwasabouttowashtheclotheswhenmyfriendcalledmeupandaskedmetoplaywithher.ItoldherthatIwouldgoontheconditionthatcompletingmywashing.ThenIgoonwashing,OnlythendidIrealizeditwassuchatiringthingtowashclothes,andhowtiredmymotherwas.Whilemymothernotonlyworkedoutsidebutalsotooktheresponsibilityofourhouseworkinside,shenevercomplainttous.AfterwashingIfelttiredthough,mymotherpraisedme,andsaidthatIwasagoodchild.Ifelthappy.
廖惜春回答：
minking做的很好的一点是,想办法用好句式和词组.但是怎么用似乎还需要学习.整个文章里的标点符号用的不太好,似乎都是逗号?需要学会断句,和正确使用标点.以下提出我的建议:1.第一句里being去掉.busywith可以直接加在...
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