求改作文（英文）
主要改下语法,时态之类的：
Asthevividlydrawingisshown,ayoungmanhasanameofbeckhamonhisface,andanothermanhasahairstylewhichisthesameasbeckham.thisthought-provokingpictureillustratesthatsuperstarhasahugeinfluenceontheyoungs.
Theinfluencefromsuperstarcanhaveagoodeffectontheyoungs,ifthesuperstar'ssocialactivityispositiveandhelpfultotheyoungs,andtheyoungswillacceptitmoreeasily,becausetheylovetheirstar,andfollowthem.sothesuperstarshouldtakethedutytoleadtheyoungstobrightfuture.onthecontrary,ifthesuperstarcannotshowtheirsocialduty,orevenbreakit,whichwillhaveabadeffectonthesociety,especiallytoyoungs.
Aboveall,superstar'sbehaviourisnotjustrelatedtohimself,butalsohaveadirectlyeffectonyoungs,sotheyshouldhavemoresocialresponsibilitiestoleadtheyoungs,andtogetherwecanmakeoursocietymoreharmonious.