问题标题：
ThankyouforteacherandschoolInaquietnight,thestarsareblinking.Underthelamplight.Iseemtoseetheteacher’ssilhouetteIheartachesI’mthinkingaboutteacher‘busysilhouetteIheartaches.Oh,mydearteacherThetenthanniversary
问题描述：
Thankyouforteacherandschool
Inaquietnight,thestarsareblinking.
Underthelamplight.Iseemtoseetheteacher’ssilhouette
Iheartaches
I’mthinkingaboutteacher‘busysilhouette
Iheartaches.
Oh,mydearteacher
Thetenthanniversarycelebrationiscoming
Iamfeelverypleased
Inhere,Iwanttothankyou
Thankyoufortheyeartotheteachingofus.
Forthispoem,Iwanttothankyou.Andthankthisschool:
Teacher,thankyou
School,thankyou
帮帮修改一下,看看哪些不是很好,老师说,背影哪一段,可我不知道怎么改...
牛铁回答：
错了几个地方：
1Thankyoufor后面接原因,改为Thankyou,teacherandschool或者在for后面原因,如Thankyouforyourculture（栽培）andeducation（教育）
2Iheartaches典型的中式英文.改为Myheartaches,或Iamheartache.
3Iamfeelverypleased能不用就不用,feel和am只能用一个,或者用于amfeeling,改掉very.改为：Iamfeelingsopleased,或Iamfeelingpleasedverymuch.其中amfeeling可改为过去式felt.
建议改几句：
1thankthisschool改为thankmyschool,亲切点.
2teacher用复数,要不有的老师会生气哦
希望能帮到你
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