我写了一篇作文,请大家帮忙看看哪里需要改的,

Directions:Writea120-wordcompositionentitled"Stress".Youshouldwriteaccordingtotheoutlinegivenbelow.

1.压力是生活的一部分；2.压力的利与弊；3.如何对付压力

以下是我写的,

Stress

Nowdaysstressraisesalongwiththerapiddevelopmentofeconermic.Inthemodernizationcity,stresscomesformdifferentareas,suchasemployment,life,workandcompetitionandsoon.Ithasbecomeapartofourlife.

Yetthereisadvantageanddisadvantageofstresstopeople.Ontheonehand,stresscanencouragetheonetomakemoreprogressing.Stresscanalsomakepeoplebeconfidenceinlife."Nostess,nomotivation"asthesayinggoes.Ontheotherhand,stressmayaffectpeople'semotionandhealth,maketheirbelow-spirited.Theymaynegetively.Inaword,stressisbadforpeople.

Sincethereisnowaytoavoidstress,weneedtofindwaystocopeit.First,weshouldhavetherightkindofattitudetowardsstess.Weshouldnottakestressassomethingweunwanted,buttransferitasamotivator.Second,weshouldneverletthestressouttocontrol.Third,weshouldlearntheartofrelaxationtohelprelievestess.

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