帮我订正一下英语作文

请英语好的同学订正下作文,四级作文,希望在语法,句子结构上给多看看

1、许多人喜欢在出席观看春节晚会

2、但有些人提出取消春节晚会

3、我的看法

SpringFestivalGalaonCCTV

ManypeopleenjoywatchingSpringFestivalGalaonCCTV,BecausethisisaconsistantCustominourcountry,

Nevertheless,somepeoplehaveputforwardtoabolishthesystem.Firstly,theythinkthatSpringFestivalGalaspendalotofmoney.Secondly,theyconsideredthattheSpringFestivalisn’tsuccessfulinrecentyears.Theirperformanceisn’tincorrespondencewith（表演不符合大多数人的兴趣）theinterestingofmanypeople,especiallyoldpeople.

Inmyopinions,althoughtSpringFestivalGalaisnotinteresting,butithasbecomeasymbolinChinesemind.whatahappyallfamilymembersgettogethertowatchingperformanceinfestivalinevening.Asaresult,Iamnotagreetoabolishthesystem.

我的水平不好,是自己写的,有不好的地方给改改,希望多教我点东西,我憋这篇作文花了1小时,哎.我作文怎么才能提高啊?

1、许多人喜欢在除夕观看春节晚会，是除夕，貌似我没翻译出来