字典翻译 问答 小学 英语 【哪位高手帮我看看这篇文章哪里有错误,最好可以缩短一些,太长了,同学说第一段没用,高中水平就可以了,文章帮忙改短一些好吧,120词就行了Everybodyshouldhaveoneormoredreamanddifferentpeoplehaved】
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【哪位高手帮我看看这篇文章哪里有错误,最好可以缩短一些,太长了,同学说第一段没用,高中水平就可以了,文章帮忙改短一些好吧,120词就行了Everybodyshouldhaveoneormoredreamanddifferentpeoplehaved】
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哪位高手帮我看看这篇文章哪里有错误,最好可以缩短一些,太长了,同学说第一段没用,

高中水平就可以了,文章帮忙改短一些好吧,120词就行了

Everybodyshouldhaveoneormoredreamanddifferentpeoplehavedifferentdreams.Thebusinessmanholdthatearnmuchmoneyistheirdream.Theacademicstaffbelievethathavingahighacademictitleatafamousuniversityoraresearchinstituteisthedream.Asastudent,Iadmittedtoagooduniversityismydream.Inordertoachievemydream,Ithink,thefollowingsareverynecessary.

Toachievemydreams,firstofall,itisimportantformetohaveaclearlong-termgoalinourlife.Besides,Ihaveshorttermgoalsindifferentperiodsoflife.Asweknow,itistheseshorttermgoalsthatmakeourlong-termgoalpossible.Second,weshouldbebothperseverantandhardworking.Whateverwedo,therearealwaystwopossibilities:successandfailure.IneverloseconfidencewhenIgetintotroubleorwhenIamconfrontedwithfailure.Instead,Icanlearnfrommyexperience,buildupmyconfidenceandworkharderandharder.Third,Ilearntheexamplesofthosewhoaresuccessful.Fromthem,tofindthekeytosuccess.Finally,Iwillgetalongwellwithmyclassmates.Icancareforeachotherandhelpeachotherinourstudy,ourworkandourlife,becauseteamworkisofgreatimportanceintherealizationofourdream.

IthinkIcanfollowtheseprinciples,Iwillcertainlyachievemydreamsinmylife.

鲍喜荣回答:
  这文章我觉得根本没必要改,已经很好了.如果非要增删那就会使它失色的.   一篇好文章不必要非要限定字数吧!重在能够清楚完整的表达.
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