字典翻译 问答 小学 作文 【麻烦帮我的作文改改语法请英文很好的来,最好是老师的或学霸,请勿乱改Inthestories“Thestoryofanhour”and“LambtoTheSlaughter”.Theyboththroughonthemethatiswomenlivedundermarriagepressure.Inthetwos】
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【麻烦帮我的作文改改语法请英文很好的来,最好是老师的或学霸,请勿乱改Inthestories“Thestoryofanhour”and“LambtoTheSlaughter”.Theyboththroughonthemethatiswomenlivedundermarriagepressure.Inthetwos】
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麻烦帮我的作文改改语法

请英文很好的来,最好是老师的或学霸,请勿乱改

Inthestories“Thestoryofanhour”and“LambtoTheSlaughter”.Theyboththroughonthemethatiswomenlivedundermarriagepressure.Inthetwostories,womentookdifferentactiontofacethemarriagepressure.In“Thestoryofanhour”,Mrs.Mallardstartedtodreamaboutthenewspringlife,butshedidnottaketheinitiative,justherimagination.Bycontrast,inthestory“LambtoTheSlaughter”,Mrs.Maloneyshowedherinitiative.Shegotherfreedombykillingherhusbandintheend.Inthestory“Thestoryofanhour”,theauthorshowedusaweakwomen(Mrs.Mallard).Shedidn’tdoanythingtobecomeafreewomen,shejustwallowedinimage(theupstairs).Likethestorysaid“Shecouldsee…..springlife”(paragraph5)and“Shebreathed……thelifemightbelong.”(P16)Mrs.Mallarddreamedaboutherfreedomthroughthatwindow,butitdidnotchangeanything,shedidnotchangeherlifebyheractualbehavior.Themarriageoppressedherforalongtime.Shestoodatapassivepositionandavoidoftherealitybuttherealitypulledherofftheimageattheend.Accordingtothestory“LambtoTheSlaughter”,Mrs.Maloneywasalsolivedunderthemarriagepressure.ButshehadthetotallydifferentendingwithMrs.Mallardbyherbehavior.Thewriterusethelambtosymbolizeher,sheusedtobeweakandlovelywifeunderherhusbandpower.Shedideverythingforthehusband.Shegothisslippers;makesdinnerandslavesoverhim.Buttheonlythingherhusbandwantsnowisaquitedivorce.Soshefoughtbacktoherhusbandlike“Atthatpoint……ofhishead.(P27)The“weak”wifekilledherhusband,shestoodataactiveposition.Mrs.Maloneykilledherhusbandtoagainstthepressure,shekilledherstatueasaweaklambaswell,afreewomenleft.Inconclusion,bothstoriesshowedthatwomenwereoppressedbymarriage,butitwasreallyimportantonwhatkindofpositionyouin.Beinitiativeorpassivity,theendingwillbetotallydifferent.

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  改动如下:   Inthestories“Thestoryofanhour”and“LambtoTheSlaughter”,bothcenteraround/focusonthethemeofwomenlivingundermarriagepressure.Inthetwostories,womentookdifferentapproachestothemarriagepressure.In“Thestoryofanhour”,Mrs.Mallardstartedtodreamaboutthenewlifeinspring.Butshedidnottakeanyinitiativestochangeherlifeforthebetter.Inthecontrary,inthestory“LambtoTheSlaughter”,Mrs.Maloneytookactionsandgotherfreedombykillingherhusbandintheend.Whiletheauthorof“Thestoryofanhour”depictedMrs.Mallardasaweakwoman,whodidn’tdoanythinginordertobecomeafreewomen.Asthestorysaid,“Shecouldsee…..springlife”(paragraph5)and“Shebreathed……thelifemightbelong.”(Page/paragraph?16)Mrs.Mallarddreamedaboutherfreedomthrough"thatwindowupstairs"andseemedtobesatisfiedwiththefreedomonlyinherdream.Shedidnotdoanythingtochangeherlife.Shelivedinanoppressivemarriageforalongtime.Shetoolapassivepositionandtriedtoavoidthereality.Buttherealitydraggedherdownandsmashedherdreamtoashesattheend.Accordingtothestory“LambtoTheSlaughter”,Mrs.Maloneyalsolivedunderthemarriagepressure.Butbytakingactions,shehadatotallydifferentendingthanMrs.Mallard.ThewriterusedthelambtosymbolizeMrs.Mallard,whousedtobealovelybutweakwifeunderherhusbandpower.Shedideverythingforherhusband.Shegothisslipperswhenhegotbackhome,madedinner,andworkedasaslaveforhim.Butallherdevotionmeantnothingtoherhusbandwhonowwantedadivorce.Soshefoughtbackandlike“Atthatpoint……ofhishead.(Page/paragraph?27)The“weak”wifetookactionandkilledherhusband.Mrs.Maloneykilledherhusbandforpurposesoffightingbackagainstoppressionandobtainingherfreedom.Intheprocessofkillingherhusband,shekilledherimageasaweaklambaswell.Inconclusion,bothstoriesshowedthatwomenwereoppressedbymarriage,butitwasreallyimportantastowhatkindofpositionyoutake.Takinginitiativesorbeingpassivewouldleadtoatotallydifferentending.   希望对你有帮助.
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