字典翻译 问答 小学 作文 求帮忙评价一下托福作文打个分~Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement:Studentsaremoreinfluencedbytheirteachersthanbytheirfriends.Sinceteachersarefrequentlycalledmetaphoricallygardeners,itseemsthatthisstatem
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求帮忙评价一下托福作文打个分~Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement:Studentsaremoreinfluencedbytheirteachersthanbytheirfriends.Sinceteachersarefrequentlycalledmetaphoricallygardeners,itseemsthatthisstatem
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求帮忙评价一下托福作文打个分~

Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement:

Studentsaremoreinfluencedbytheirteachersthanbytheirfriends.

Sinceteachersarefrequentlycalledmetaphoricallygardeners,itseemsthatthisstatementdomakessense.HoweverIholdafirmviewthatstudentsaremorelikelytobeaffectedbytheirfriendsbasedonreasonsfollow.

Firstly,thelengthoftimeofgettingonwithstudentsisfundamentalforinfluence.Apparently,studentsonlyhaveopportunitiestogetalongwithteachersduringclasswithmostofthesetimeconcerningtextbook,examandsoforth.Whenitcomestofriends,however,thingsaredifferent.Friendscompanyeachothernearlyeveryminuteinthewholedayespeciallyforstudents.Forexample,astudentmightbeinfluencedbyhisfriendswhiletheyhangoutaroundtheschool,eatlunchtogetherormoreoften,takeaclasstogether.Thus,howcouldateachercompareawholedaycompaniedfriend?

Secondly,itismucheasierforstudentstobeinfluencedbytheirfriendsforamyriadofcommontopicstheyhave.AsIindicateabove,topicsbetweenstudentsandteachersaremostlytiresomeandutilitarianconcentratingongrade.Comparedwiththis,topicsamongfriendsaremorecolorfulwhichwillofcourseinfluencestudentsinmanyaspectsandinvariousways.Let’stakeonetypicaltopicsinasexamples.Gossipisthepermanenttopicbetweengirlsandwhiletheyaretalkingaboutit,theyareinfluencingeachotherbytheirjuvenilebutsharp-cutopinionofsomestars’behaviorslikeasuperstarcheatedhisgirlfriend.Effectslikethisplayanon-ignorableroleintheconstructionofstudents’ownworldview.

Thelastbutmostsignificantreasonisthatstudentsarecloserwiththeirfriendsratherthanteachers.Normally,onaccountofalong-termeducationaboutrespecttoteacher,studentsonlytreatteachersasadistantemotionlessperson.Whatevenworseisthestudents’reversephysiologythatmakesthemdotheexactlycontrarythingthattheirteacherstellthemto.Butamongfriends,theyareinsimilarageandareequalthereforetheyrespecteachotherandareeasilytobeconvincedorinfluenced.Forinstance,ateacherappealsstudenttodonatemoneyforsomereasonsometimesendsupwithnothingbutcri

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  楼上也太敷衍了吧.   各种空格没打不是什么大问题,但比如“thisstatementdomakessense”就不该出现,应为“doesmakesense”.   无论句号逗号后面都必须有空格.   如果你认为第三点最重要,那就把它放在第一点的位置.(其实为觉得第一点和第三点差别不大,你可以合并他们再加一个反方观点)   如果我打分的话,按你综合写作满分算,应该写作是24左右.
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