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哪位朋友能帮我批改一下这个雅思作文,我自己写的,第一次尝试,是剑桥4text4的小作文,ThefirstlinegraphtellsusthevisitabroadbyUKresidentsandvisitstotheUKbyoverseasresidents.Thesecondbarchatillustrates
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哪位朋友能帮我批改一下这个雅思作文,我自己写的,第一次尝试,是剑桥4text4的小作文,
ThefirstlinegraphtellsusthevisitabroadbyUKresidentsandvisitstotheUKbyoverseasresidents.ThesecondbarchatillustratesthemostpopularcountriesvisitedbyUKresident1999.
Fromthefirstgraph,thevisitsabroadbyUKresidentsform12millions1979,to52millions1999.During2decades,theadditionwas40millions.ButthevisitstotheUKbyoverseasresidentsfrom10millions1979to27millions1999,approximate17millionsadditionsduringpast20years.
Evidently,inthebarchat,themostpopularcountrybyUKresidents1999isFrance,almost11millionsoftUKvisitorschosenit.SecondsSpain,about9.5millionsvisitorschosenit.The3rdto5thistheUSA,GreeceandTurkey.
ItisnoticeablethatwiththegrowingofUKresident,thecountrieswhicharoundtheBritishwillbethemostbeneficalcountries
韩毅回答：
你可以去搜“新东方批改网”,这个是提供专业批改服务~反正页面很精美,价格也……唉,如果不是打折期去批改的话,就心痛死人了……不过毕竟是外教,质量很不错,如果你基础不太好,语法错误比较多,那就找这里批改.但是你在网上和这些外教交流提问的时候也得用英文,憋死我了TT他们有三个级别的批改标准,楼主斟酌吧~
最后祝楼主好运!
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