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改篇英语作文,高考标准,小弟英语烂请耐心指出错误,万分感谢根据Youcan'tchoosewhatyouaregiven,butyoucanchoosehowyoumakeuseofit.写篇作文Lifeislikeaboxofchocolate,youneverknowwhatyouaregoingtoge
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改篇英语作文,高考标准,小弟英语烂请耐心指出错误,万分感谢
根据Youcan'tchoosewhatyouaregiven,butyoucanchoosehowyoumakeuseofit.写篇作文
Lifeislikeaboxofchocolate,youneverknowwhatyouaregoingtoget.Whatwecandoistoenjoythelife.
Forinstance,wecan'tchangeourlookingandbrain.Facedwiththissituation,wehavenoalternativebuttomakefulluseofit.MaybeIhaven'tgreatintelligence,butIhavestrongperseverance.Noonecandenythefactthatsweatandeffortcanproveourselves.Soitisnecessaryforustosticktoourdream.Onlyinthiswaycanwehavearosylife.
Tosumup,itisjustifiedforustobravelychangethefate.Dowhatyoucan,withwhatyouhave,whereyouare.
孟如回答:
整体来说,挺好的!
enjoylife,the去掉
changeourlooks
andbrain改为orbrain
Facedwiththissituation“面对这一局面/局势”这个短语用于此处,太大了,改为Inthisway,"因此"
Idon'thavegreatintelligence
havearosylife改为havearosyfuture意思更通顺些
tobravelychangethefate.改为tobebraveandtrytochangeourfate.
还有个建议:整篇中you与we来回替换,有时让你迷惑,可以统一一下,注意连贯
冯爱伟回答:
谢谢,我有时候感觉写起来不很顺,而且连词用得不好,一篇文章绕来绕去的,这些是不是要经常练才行?
孟如回答:
是的,别客气!写作最好的方式是模仿。多读一下英文读物,多学习他们的表达就好了。自己多写也很重要,practicemakesperfect!
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