1.furthertheirstudyabroad 　　=>Inrecentyears,moreandmorepeopleinclinedtomakeuptheirmindstogoandstudyabroad. 　　2.Everymorningweopenoureyes,wefoundthatweborninthisrapidlychangingsociety,inparticular,intermsofworkingandstudyingetc.(汉语式英语) 　　=>Wehavewitnessedthatthesocietytakesrapidandsounddevelopmentcurrently,particularlyinscientificresearchandourworkingenvironment. 　　3.youhaveprobablyreadatonetimeoranotherthatcurrenttrendsinthiscontroversyshowsthatthereistwoopinionsinthisquestion,whichistreathimastheangel,andotherindividualsthinkhimisthedemon.（无法说是好坏,只能是个人观念中的优缺点吧） 　　=>youprobablyhaveread（感觉是这个语序吧）thecurrentdebatemanytimeswhichgoeslikethisasthecontroversydescribed,thatisagreatnumberofpeoplespeakhighlyofstudyingabroadwhilemanyonesopposedtoitseriously. 　　4.ThewayIseeit,Iamtotallyagreewiththispointwhichisthinkheistheangel. 　　=>However,frommypointofview,Iamtotallyagreewiththeformer. 　　5.Thereareseveralreasonstoaccountforthephenomenonanditwouldbeagreatbenefittous.(过度···) 　　6.Ontheotherhands,Chinaisacountrywhichisdevelopingallthetime.(没必要用从句吧,累赘,要不改一下··) 　　=>Ontheotherhands,It'swellknownthatChinahasbeencontinuouslydevelopinginrecentyears, 　　7.Sothatwhenwegosomedevelopedcountriese.g,USA,UK,NASA]wemusttopayhigherfees.（感觉主从顺序有点不舒服） 　　=>SothatwemustpayhigherfeeswhenwegosomedevelopedcountriessuchasUSA,UK,andNASA, 　　8.Thisshowsthatthereisanythinghasitsprofoundsignificance（意译,改进） 　　=>Itshowsustheconceptthateverythingismatchedwiththerealmeaningofitsexistence.However,Asapopularsayinggoes,everycoinhastwosides,boththeperfectionandtheimperfection. 　　9.Wecomeinthisinformationexplosionofthecommunityneedstheobjectivedialecticalmaterialismweseethings（汉语式） 　　=>Iturgentlyrequiretheobjectivedialecticalmaterialisminthiseraofinformationexplosion··· 　　只是个人观点··· 　　总体感觉你汉语化有点严重,我都怀疑你是直接把中文放到网页或是软件上翻译的···这样改,还不如你给我汉语翻译的快呢·· 　　像是：ifheismoregoodthanharm,topromotehim,andifmoreharmthangood,tolimithis.直接~ 　　语序尤其是从句