请英语高手帮我点评我的这篇英语四级作文,

1：本社团的主要活动内容

2：参加本社团的好处

3：如何加入本社团

WelcometojointheSunshinevolunteerclub!Ifyouhavealoveheart,yououghttojoinus.Wewilllookintheolderthosewholivealoneandtalkwiththem.Inaddition,wealsogototheprimaryschooltoteachtheminterestingknowledge,forexample,theinterestingmath,scientificknowledgeandthestormofintelligence.

TheSunshinevolunteerclubwillprovideaopportunitytoletyouhelpthepeoplewhoarepoorordisabled.Ithinktheactivitieswillimproveyourabilityofactionortalk.Furthermore,peoplewillworktogetherandyouwilllearnsomethinghowtogetalongwellwithothers.Finally,youwillmakesomefriendsinourclub.

Ifyouwanttojoinourclub,justcallusat691800orsendanemailtoSunshinevolunteer@hstc.edu.cn,withinformationattached.Andafteroneweek,youwillbeamemberofourclub.Sodon'thesitate,joinus.